Good job David! Thank you for sharing this video. Don’t worry about dynamics yet. First you want to focus on accuracy as much as you can. First thing I noticed it …. 1bar 4th beat … that is not a 8th note so you need longer duration. One more technical thing that you need to keep all your fingers close to the fretboard until you finish the last note of each bar. So you need to understand about tempo choice… this is a little too fast with your accuracy of duratuon and fingering movement. All good! Great effort so far…now you need to become a great teacher for yourself! Please check the last bar…. start with up stroke on end of 1!
Do you have reverb on? Notation B… it was a little difficult to hear any unwanted noise from strings. (harmonics or any open sound) In order to catch these … no reverb, less bass and more bass. Duration problem! Check 2nd bar…. end of 3rd beat…. on the 4th beat is no sound but you sustained! Please check that. Just like that. This tempo is a little hard to hear all noises, directions of picking and each note duration. This is often happening that you paid attention on notes and rhythm but you need to do a little more deeper! Good job! You can fix them very easy.
So everyone should know about guitar learning is not just learning how to play correct notes. More about fixing typical fingering problem, picking direction problem or duration problem. That one of reason this one page taught me many things.
Tomo