Thanks so much for sharing this! I think you need to hold your pick softer. A little too heavy.
Good job playing Blue Monk R 3 7 swing & singing this melody. You need to practice interval singing (Major Scale)
No need to be peferct but you need to train your ears and singing sklills. Please sing softer! So you can play softer R 3 7.
Please check my suggstion video on this topic.
Tomo